Rebz :)

You're right, I can do much better. But looking back, I was barely 13. And it was my first ever. I will yet again edit, make it longer, and with ...

Yeah I should really add to this... but I had writers block, then I started on another and forgot about this. I don't even have a title. I shall work ...

Thankyou, constructive critism! Yeah, I'll edit it and make it more emotional in the last paragraph, and fixed up the 'one of my loves' part. PS. Two o'clock Saturday = ...

LOL. Loved it :)

Thanks you two, very constructive critisism there. I've improved grammar, and when I'm not on such a time schedule I'll slow it down and stretch it out. As for Damon ...

Thanks I'll work on it, because it isn't supposed to be light-hearted, you're right.

So I’ll feed you meth Seriously?? That really needs re-wording! That's all. The only word I can use is this: Deep. It's fabulous!

Thanks heaps, I'm glad both of you like it and feel connected with Aisling. I will make it play-doh again and fix it. PS Aisling isn't just playing up because ...

All righty, but excuse me for a sec... A FEW HUNDRED!? OK, much better. before I get more reveiws to make it longer, i want to lay down some facts: ...

okay, thanks people, I'll play around with it to expand/describe and add on.

hey mo. luv it but because of the talking, it is more like a short story than a poem but i like the 'tis thing. the last line is so ...